Sunday, April 28, 2013
What do you Think?
Now that I've posted my teaser,What do you think should, I post my story on the blog?
Wednesday, April 24, 2013
The long and the short of it.
Well ok I'll just tell the short of it :) as you can see from the
lack of activity summer is here spare time spent on computers is being eaten up
by gardens well alas the pore blog..... sie Well just to keep you all up dated
I still put-puting away at a film project, biding a
barn redoing a green house gardening working.. I like to
eat sometimes to :) So if you get the chance let us know how
your doing and what your up to!
Ps Jess you don't haft to tell us what your doing we have
a purity good idea already ;)
Monday, April 8, 2013
Ronferd's Teaser.
This is the teaser for my story. Any suggestions or comments you may have please just post them.
William looked up. Was that the sound of one of the castle's many settling joints? Or was it them? Or him? The sound that came to his straining ears had been almost indistinguishable. He trained his eyes in the direction of the uncertain sound. The hair on his neck stood on end and his heart started to speed up as another small sound came from behind him. It took incredible effort not to turn.
So it was happening! He waited, but there was no sign of anything. He breathed a silent prayer as he slowly turned around. He saw no one. But somehow he just knew someone was there. And it was someone who could move silently.
Another floor board squeaked slightly. This time in the bedroom! It was up to him now. He lurched forward, Grabbed the door handle, turned it, and yanked the door open.
A window was at the opposite end of the room, with a bed to one side. On his right was a massive desk where the earl probably did paper work with his chamberlain. Moon light lay in a small slice on the floor. He stood there a moment, unsure what to do next. It was answered for him.
A small object caught the light as it spun toward him. He just ducked in time! He heard a light but solid thud in the door, right over his head!
He dashed for the cover of the Earl’s desk! He dove behind it as two more projectiles hit the wall to his right!
Will sat there, trying to still his pounding heart, unsure what to do next. He had never been trained against something like this! Cautiously he peered over the top of the magnificent desk, which was more like a "small" oak table he realized.
**********
Zared waited with silted eyes as the door swung open. A silhouette stood uncertainly in the doorway. He smiled thinly. When he had sensed him behind the anteroom table he'd thought he would be a problem. Now he could see that this fellow was not accustomed to this kind of thing. Standing in the doorway with a dim light behind him, he could have killed him the second he was visible. But it was never a good idea to underestimate. And it would best to get rid of him before he could sound an alarm. The fact that this person had not done so to begin with suggested that he hadn't been sure whether there was someone or not. And wasn't a fool to have done it when he’d first heard him. Zared had made those sounds on purpose to see what sort of fellow this was.
His hand dropped and came up like a snake. In one smooth motion he threw the knife over-handed. The sharp, blackened blade caught the moonlight as it spun end over end toward its target. The figure ducked with the speed of a cat! Zared instantly followed his original throw with two more. The figure lunged to the cover of a table on the opposite side of the room. Zared raised his eyebrows. This guy had good instinct. A pity he had to dispatch him. With that, he rose from his crouch and ghosted to his left.
**********
At first William could see nothing. Then a tiny motion to his right caught his attention. His blood almost froze. An indistinct shadow came silently toward him. Seeming almost to glide. The shadow was upon him before he knew it.
He just had time to rise when it leaped over the table. A foot slammed into his chest and he crashed into the wall behind him. Before he could catch his breath he was pushed down on the floor. He could only make out the general shape of the head above him! He felt a something sharp at his throat.
What do you think.................................
I would like to give a special thanks to Cheyenne Ayda for being a volunteer editor.
William looked up. Was that the sound of one of the castle's many settling joints? Or was it them? Or him? The sound that came to his straining ears had been almost indistinguishable. He trained his eyes in the direction of the uncertain sound. The hair on his neck stood on end and his heart started to speed up as another small sound came from behind him. It took incredible effort not to turn.
So it was happening! He waited, but there was no sign of anything. He breathed a silent prayer as he slowly turned around. He saw no one. But somehow he just knew someone was there. And it was someone who could move silently.
Another floor board squeaked slightly. This time in the bedroom! It was up to him now. He lurched forward, Grabbed the door handle, turned it, and yanked the door open.
A window was at the opposite end of the room, with a bed to one side. On his right was a massive desk where the earl probably did paper work with his chamberlain. Moon light lay in a small slice on the floor. He stood there a moment, unsure what to do next. It was answered for him.
A small object caught the light as it spun toward him. He just ducked in time! He heard a light but solid thud in the door, right over his head!
He dashed for the cover of the Earl’s desk! He dove behind it as two more projectiles hit the wall to his right!
Will sat there, trying to still his pounding heart, unsure what to do next. He had never been trained against something like this! Cautiously he peered over the top of the magnificent desk, which was more like a "small" oak table he realized.
**********
Zared waited with silted eyes as the door swung open. A silhouette stood uncertainly in the doorway. He smiled thinly. When he had sensed him behind the anteroom table he'd thought he would be a problem. Now he could see that this fellow was not accustomed to this kind of thing. Standing in the doorway with a dim light behind him, he could have killed him the second he was visible. But it was never a good idea to underestimate. And it would best to get rid of him before he could sound an alarm. The fact that this person had not done so to begin with suggested that he hadn't been sure whether there was someone or not. And wasn't a fool to have done it when he’d first heard him. Zared had made those sounds on purpose to see what sort of fellow this was.
His hand dropped and came up like a snake. In one smooth motion he threw the knife over-handed. The sharp, blackened blade caught the moonlight as it spun end over end toward its target. The figure ducked with the speed of a cat! Zared instantly followed his original throw with two more. The figure lunged to the cover of a table on the opposite side of the room. Zared raised his eyebrows. This guy had good instinct. A pity he had to dispatch him. With that, he rose from his crouch and ghosted to his left.
**********
At first William could see nothing. Then a tiny motion to his right caught his attention. His blood almost froze. An indistinct shadow came silently toward him. Seeming almost to glide. The shadow was upon him before he knew it.
He just had time to rise when it leaped over the table. A foot slammed into his chest and he crashed into the wall behind him. Before he could catch his breath he was pushed down on the floor. He could only make out the general shape of the head above him! He felt a something sharp at his throat.
I would like to give a special thanks to Cheyenne Ayda for being a volunteer editor.
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