Friday, September 13, 2013

And so William said to him ...He said um....he said.....................

As you can see I'm making  great progress ...Or not. I'm have trouble coming up with inspiration to keep Writing. Any suggestions??.

O.K....
I'm actually only at the beginning of the story.
And I mite just come back to this part later.


I also em not really liking how this is sounding. It's just not flowing the way I want it to.


 A warm breise breathed in the late summer's morning. A small castle stood on a man made rise.Yet Despite its size, there was a sense of grim pride in the old weathered fort. Its three towers were not much to look at. Only seven feat in diameter and less than six meters high. The walls buttresses were starting to crumble. In short, not exactly Buckingham palace or Antioch. Yet its pried was well founded. It was located in Surry,close to the border of West Sussex._________________________________.
William took a deep breath and let it out slowly. He was going to miss this place,he thought. He looked around at the old decaying walls,supports and bedraggled towers. A door creaked   behind him. He smiled slightly that would be Hallard he thought. He knew it would be. (Hallard's has a bit of a local ascent)
Hallard came and stood next to him. He was solid built man with broad shoulders. although Will Was a hair taller than him.
 Will miss it lad? Will nodded. He would miss it. He would miss The roping about with the village children. Playing in and out of the castle's nocks and hid y holds. He'd miss the shear freedom of the forest,it's paths and the time he had spent with the forester.
Your father is proud You know that your doing this. Hallard said,pulling William out of his line of thought. Hard to tell he said. glancing meaning at the mane keep where the lord of the castle lived. Hallard cocked his head at him. Now Will he said a little sternly your fathers a good man he wants what best for you.
 William nodded,I know... I just wish... He shook the thought off. He knew    ? his father was glad he was doing this.
 William was the youngest of 4 brothers. Each of witch had moved out and gone on to become knights. Harelld the eldest had gone to lord Udol's castle to the est to become a knight. He quickly worked his way to the top of his class. He alwas had a strong sense of honer and justice and after he was knighted lord Udol decided to make him sherif. Whitch was a honerble position.
 Alfred the second born was not as reserved as his brother.He became a knight when he went on a campaign with the baron he was aprentest to and brout great honer to his famly.

4 comments:

  1. hmmm let me think about it.

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  2. Just consider the fact that ALL good books first came from someone just thinking them up. Which in turn is exactly what you can do. You are in good hands. Hold in there. Perhaps you can do what has helped me when I have trouble thinking of something that I want to write. Which is.......just use things in your everyday life to inspire the writing. I find that when I try to just sit down and write an entire something right on the spot, I usually stump myself for sometimes hours. And then I just decide to stop, then just minutes later (when I am doing something completely separate from writing) I see or hear something that gives me just what I needed for the work of writemanship. I hope this has helped. :) - Toymaker97

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  3. Yeah, that's a good idea.

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  4. well, it really depends on the type of story line you want.

    Political/historical/complex/hack-and-slash: perhaps Will's father is the central figure in a court faction that is trying to counteract the spy master's faction. The power in the kingdom is currently split between the court faction (most of the pureblood English dukes plus the wealthy merchants and monasteries, they obviously favor an end of the hundred years war with the french and a realignment towards Pro-England policy) and the Spymaster Faction (consisting of the Spymaster and his corps, French dukes controlled by England, and the clergy. These forces are pushing England towards European expansion.). The Royal family is limited in what it can do without tearing the country apart through civil war. At the beginning of the book the Spymaster is winning because of the success the English are enjoying in the Hundred years war. This success allows the spymaster to put all the father's sons into positions as knights where the spymaster could keep an eye on them, using this as blackmail against the father. the father knows this and is sending his youngest off to the posting, but the father has actually connived for Will's party (staffed of course by the spymaster's troops) to be ambushed by a band of mercenaries. These mercenaries (the Albion Brigade or the Flame of Excalibur) would actually be commanded and formed by Will's maternal uncle, a Norman of the DeMontfort blood line. They would then deliver a message for Will bearing the Royal Sigil saying something to the tune that his father wants him to go undercover to the Holy Land with these mercenaries where he would meet up with an old friend of his fathers, the grandmaster of the Knights Hospitallers. The story then follows Will traveling first to the netherlands (to get a better boat). then by water to the Christian states where the spymasters assasins work in tandem with an Archbishop to force Will and his band into moorish territory (maybe making friends with the assasin Brotherhood). then to Valencia where they take a ship to Florence Italy (where they help out the city against the Holy Roman Empire). then a helpful cardinal (seeking to weaken the pope) helps the mercs down the Italian peninsula to Palermo Sicily, where Will's maternal side (Norman btw) has a keep and gives them a ride to the Knights Hospitallers base in Antioch. From there Will has to help the GM forge a kingdom in return for troops. then Will returns to england. From there you tell me. :)


    This is just an idea sparked from a tired mind.

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